Ever Ever After

A helpful tool

It is been a real challenge for me to correct others mistakes because it is difficult to put in others’ mind in order to understand what they are trying to say. However, it has been very helpful to me correct others learners mistake mainly because through their errors I could see mines; consequently I could improve my English. I hope U Chile students have seen the advantages of having someone editing their writing. When someone edits your works you learn…

MY correction

My favorite gadget

Honestly, I don't have like(x) a "favorite" gadget, but something that helps me a lot is my MP3.
There I can record new songs from the choir, listen to my favorite songs and also have a background of all the papers, essays and readings for each semester.

New technologies allows(f) people to organize their lives in a better way and(x)(p) also these things give a chance to relax by listening to your favorite music...

Corrections II

William:

In my opinion a great, (p) and interesting film is AI (artificial intelligence) directed by the experimented (ww) Stanley Kubrick and the Midas king of Hollywood Steven Spielberg (p) this movie is about a new type of android that has the ability of (ww) love. This story is set in a near future, (p) where the (nn) global warming has led to ecological disasters all over the world, (p) and a drastic reduction of the (nn) human population (p) for this reason the Cybertronics company create (f) droids with different characteristics like prostitute droids or droids with the boy appearance (p)in this context a family lost his first and unique son and try to replace him with a droid (p) that (ww)’s the beginning of the story.

I remember(t) that I saw this film alone last year(p) and(x) when I saw this film (nn) (sm) I was surprised because this film is about science fiction but the argument is very realistic(p) because(nn) I think in some decades this could be real and maybe machines shall(ww) replace us.

Carry on with the story the droid kid called David conquest the heart of Monica; David’s adopted (f) mother (p) he has a good life with another droid with the appearance of a teddy bear called Teddy(p) after a short time the real son of the family recover(f) his health and he become(ww) jealous about David and a very sad story continues(ww) … (sm)better see it.

P: punctuation
Ww: wrong word
Nn: not needed
Sm: something missing
F: form

Maria Jose:
I and the future (wo)

In the future… I would like to be working in my profession whit(sp) environmental thematic(ww). Always I liked (wo) (sm vt)the PDI (Policía de Investigaciones), maybe I will to(x) work in this institution.I would like to publish paper(f) with my investigations,(p nn) to reach with the community in urbanism and environment.

Personally… I would like to live alone, (p) or may be with some female friend, (p)in the city, but a(x) (sm) don’t liked the city life, (p) because is very uncomfortable for the(nn) health,(p) in many years in the future I will live in the periphery zone, (p) with a good system transportation(wo) to(ww) the city.

And(ww) to star an athletic life, it´s important for(nn) to be in form(ww),(p) I begun to practice sports, I am trying, but is very hard for my, I am lazy.

I would like to be different things or to return(ww) to do activities that I have left (ww) (sm). I am keen to return (sm)

Sm: something missing
Sp: spelling
Ww: wrong word
Vt: verb tense
P nn: punctuation not needed
x: this should not be used here!!!!

Kes essay

This story is about a boy who wanted to train a kestrel. The main theme in this book, for me is abandon. Firstly, how Billy’s family interact Jud the oldest brother is a bully, the mother still lives as she was not a mother at all and Billy has to look for his own education, quality of life and needs.

The story begins with the two brothers sleeping in the same bed in a house in bad conditions. After Jud goes to work, Billy gets up and realized that Jud has taken his bicycle, so he will have to deliver the newspaper on foot.

After he returns to his home, he goes to a shop looking for a book about training kestrel because he found a nest during one of his walks. As he was not a member of the public library and he did not have enough money to buy the book, he stole one from a shop. Then, at night he went to the place where he met the kestrel and also stole the bird. In this part the flashback ends.

Later on in the same day, Billy is at school. He said something while one of his teachers was taking register, and what he said provoked that the teachers said a name wrong. In the break Billy goes home and practice with his birth; he is very happy with the idea of finally having someone to share experiences.

To conclude, until this part of the story what has happened with Billy and all the situations that he has had to face with his brother, mother and at school, can be interpreted as the search for some changes in his life; his life is everything but happy. Therefore Billy, as any human being who is not happy with their life, want to feel that his life is worthy, the best way to accomplish this is by raising or training another person or in this case a bird.

Corrections

Maria Jose:

Hello!

The (extra word, it is not necessary) ¨Fiestas patrias¨ are (ww) a typical celebration of Chile (wo). In this day it(extra word) is celebrated the independence day, but(sm) really is the celebration of de firth(misspelling) national meeting, (p) the date is the 18 of September (wo) (ww).

Many Chileans people,(p) don’t know your(wf) (sm) history,(p) (sm)only celebrated(wt) in this date.(p) And remembering that are Chileans,(p) The typical folklore dance, (sm)¨Cueca¨, only is danced for the people is this date (wo),(p) in the year,(sm) they forget (sm)it the cueca(wo for almost all this paragraph).

When (sm) was a child, I liked to dance cuenca in the(ww) school,(p) all years in this date I danced cueca… and my Qualification(ww) in sports was good.

The last year I celebrated (sm)with my family, (sm)is very funny,(p) because all are(wt) happy. Sometimes (sm)do(ww) empanadas (typical food Chilean). But (sm)is very slow, then we buy(sm).(sm)Is easier to do a barbecue, (sm)we do ¨anticuchos¨.

So, with the(extra word) ¨chicha¨, typical drink (sm)of grape, the(extra word) people drink a lot and dancing(wt) cueca. In the Park O´higgins is located de fondas(wo),(p) in this place many people re-joins(ww) to celebrating(wt), the(extra word) children fly a(extra w) kite(s),(p) because the wind in September is very(extra w) favorable,(p)(sm) in the sky the view is beautiful,(p) (sm) is very colouring.I prefer not (sm)going to the(extra w) fondas.

William

Being Chilean is very difficult(p) we always have troubles in the football (extra word) soccer an example is the defeat last Sunday 0-3 before (ww) the Brazilian selection (p) but not only this meant to be Chilean, we have a lot of (ww) traditions and(ww) (p) the greatest is the Fiestas Patrias or independence day (extra phrase), colloquially called by the Chileans “el dieciocho” this special week, yes!! (mw)Is a week of celebrations, even when “el dieciocho” is in a bad date(ww) (p)for example Tuesday(p) the(extra w) politician vote(vt) immediately to create a public holiday to prolong(ww) “el dieciocho” , I wonder why this people vote immediately (ms)this type of things but when they must vote (mw)a essential law they create (ww) a lot of obstacles.

The typical(extra phrase, it is not clear) Chileans always go to “fondas”; (mw) a type of tent where the(extra w) people can dance the typical Chilean dance (wo) called “la cueca” (p)as well we can eat a lot of things like empanadas or anticuchos and obviously drink a big glass of chicha, I remember when I was a child that sometimes I go(vt) with my parents to the Fonda in Parral (p) but I always fall (vt) asleep for this reason my parents usually went alone.

In this time I’ll have my vengeance(ww) and I will do what I want (ms) maybe go to the fonda or go to my relatives (mw), have some fun, make a good barbecue and put on (ww) weight or perhaps (mw)stayed in my (ww) home alone studying for the exams. I don’t have a special “dieciocho” because in my opinion each new(extra w) dieciocho could be better.

Posts

Maria J is still making the same types of mistakes like misspelling, word choice and plural, pronouns and sentences length. However, her ideas are easy to understand, but she is still thinking in Spanish when she writes.

My second student literally translates from Spanish to English, there are some mistakes related to language use. By this I mean, I understand what he is trying to say because we have the same native language, but in English there are a few things that have their own order. The types of error that he makes are almost the same. For example: misspelling, word choice and word order.
While I read the UCH’s posts I remembered when I was in first year and I made the same kind of mistakes, actually a not so long time ago I was still making the same type of mistakes…