UCH students

William's post correction:

Learning English: my experience.

Well my experience learning English was when I went to the kindergarten called wendolin(f) this time was the first that I began to learn English in this period I was 3 years old and I can’t remember who was my first teacher(wo).

In my opinion the first time that I learned English really was(wo) when I won a grant sponsored by the ministry(f) of education)f) and(x) (p) then I really learned English in an institute called I.L.S that mean(f) international(f) language(f) service(f) this happened when I was nine years old(p),(x) I remember a lot of teachers but specially Mr. John Penhollow (sm) with him I learned the base of my current English(wo).

In(ww) the beginning I like(f) a lot to learn English because always I (wo)had a special talent to learn other languages(p) in(ww) the(x) school(p) this subjects(f) was (sm) the(x) better(ww) mark like an A+ in Chile a 7(wo)(p) but when the English course was(ww) more difficult I had serious problems to made(t) compatible the primary and secondary (sm) with the English course an for this simple reason I began to hate the(x) English, till I finished the English course(p) this happen when I was fourteen years old.

I like to learn with a teacher and practicing whit(sp) my classmates but when I learned better is when I listen (sm)English music and especially when I played(t) pc games in English with subtitles, so I can say that I am a cyber learner.

I think that is difficult (s.m) understand the different accents of the(x) English speakers, in(ww) this moment the only person that that speak(f) in English is my teacher Simon,(p) in my case(ww) English is very useful because there are a lot of texts, books, games, TV series, works, papers that are in English and the only solution is (sm)speak English and for this (p)in my opinion(p) English is fundamental.

Maria Jose's post correction:

Abstract: Desert cities are living on borrowed, UN warns

Desert cities are living on borrowed time, the climate is in constant change and it’s essential to have knowledge of the(ww) environment.A lot of people live in such places so it's very import(f) to generate enough electricity and water. Physical(ww) characteristics(ww), like soil and water, are precious.

Desert cities have a lot of problems with water management; (sm) water salinization(ww) and the reduction of glaciers are common.

The end?

Billy buried Kes. Then, he went to the place where he first saw his dear bird. As soon as he out his eyes in the old building his memories and tears begun to run into his mind and face. “How could Jud be so cold?” Billy asked to the warm wind.

The poor child was so sad that he did not notice that a blurry shadow was looking at him from the old building. Suddenly, the shadow became a bird, actually it was a kestrel. Billy thought that his mind was playing with him, but when he focused his gaze he realized that it was another kestrel bigger than his young dead one!!!

From that moment on his mind and soul begun a discussion; what should he do about the kestrel? “Should I capture it or leave it there?” That was the constant question in Billy’s head. Thus, the memory of what Jud did to his dear Kes hit him like a strong kick in the stomach… He did not want to risk another bird’s life by taking it anywhere nearer to his evil brother. Therefore, Billy decided to leave the Kestrel in the old building, but with the unsaid promise of visit it every time he could.

After he felt a bit better, Billy thought it was time to return to his house and get some sleep. Tomorrow would be another day, life must go on, but he would never forget about the only being that brought some light into his dark life, a kestrel named Kes.

Ever Ever After

A helpful tool

It is been a real challenge for me to correct others mistakes because it is difficult to put in others’ mind in order to understand what they are trying to say. However, it has been very helpful to me correct others learners mistake mainly because through their errors I could see mines; consequently I could improve my English. I hope U Chile students have seen the advantages of having someone editing their writing. When someone edits your works you learn…

MY correction

My favorite gadget

Honestly, I don't have like(x) a "favorite" gadget, but something that helps me a lot is my MP3.
There I can record new songs from the choir, listen to my favorite songs and also have a background of all the papers, essays and readings for each semester.

New technologies allows(f) people to organize their lives in a better way and(x)(p) also these things give a chance to relax by listening to your favorite music...

Corrections II

William:

In my opinion a great, (p) and interesting film is AI (artificial intelligence) directed by the experimented (ww) Stanley Kubrick and the Midas king of Hollywood Steven Spielberg (p) this movie is about a new type of android that has the ability of (ww) love. This story is set in a near future, (p) where the (nn) global warming has led to ecological disasters all over the world, (p) and a drastic reduction of the (nn) human population (p) for this reason the Cybertronics company create (f) droids with different characteristics like prostitute droids or droids with the boy appearance (p)in this context a family lost his first and unique son and try to replace him with a droid (p) that (ww)’s the beginning of the story.

I remember(t) that I saw this film alone last year(p) and(x) when I saw this film (nn) (sm) I was surprised because this film is about science fiction but the argument is very realistic(p) because(nn) I think in some decades this could be real and maybe machines shall(ww) replace us.

Carry on with the story the droid kid called David conquest the heart of Monica; David’s adopted (f) mother (p) he has a good life with another droid with the appearance of a teddy bear called Teddy(p) after a short time the real son of the family recover(f) his health and he become(ww) jealous about David and a very sad story continues(ww) … (sm)better see it.

P: punctuation
Ww: wrong word
Nn: not needed
Sm: something missing
F: form

Maria Jose:
I and the future (wo)

In the future… I would like to be working in my profession whit(sp) environmental thematic(ww). Always I liked (wo) (sm vt)the PDI (Policía de Investigaciones), maybe I will to(x) work in this institution.I would like to publish paper(f) with my investigations,(p nn) to reach with the community in urbanism and environment.

Personally… I would like to live alone, (p) or may be with some female friend, (p)in the city, but a(x) (sm) don’t liked the city life, (p) because is very uncomfortable for the(nn) health,(p) in many years in the future I will live in the periphery zone, (p) with a good system transportation(wo) to(ww) the city.

And(ww) to star an athletic life, it´s important for(nn) to be in form(ww),(p) I begun to practice sports, I am trying, but is very hard for my, I am lazy.

I would like to be different things or to return(ww) to do activities that I have left (ww) (sm). I am keen to return (sm)

Sm: something missing
Sp: spelling
Ww: wrong word
Vt: verb tense
P nn: punctuation not needed
x: this should not be used here!!!!

Kes essay

This story is about a boy who wanted to train a kestrel. The main theme in this book, for me is abandon. Firstly, how Billy’s family interact Jud the oldest brother is a bully, the mother still lives as she was not a mother at all and Billy has to look for his own education, quality of life and needs.

The story begins with the two brothers sleeping in the same bed in a house in bad conditions. After Jud goes to work, Billy gets up and realized that Jud has taken his bicycle, so he will have to deliver the newspaper on foot.

After he returns to his home, he goes to a shop looking for a book about training kestrel because he found a nest during one of his walks. As he was not a member of the public library and he did not have enough money to buy the book, he stole one from a shop. Then, at night he went to the place where he met the kestrel and also stole the bird. In this part the flashback ends.

Later on in the same day, Billy is at school. He said something while one of his teachers was taking register, and what he said provoked that the teachers said a name wrong. In the break Billy goes home and practice with his birth; he is very happy with the idea of finally having someone to share experiences.

To conclude, until this part of the story what has happened with Billy and all the situations that he has had to face with his brother, mother and at school, can be interpreted as the search for some changes in his life; his life is everything but happy. Therefore Billy, as any human being who is not happy with their life, want to feel that his life is worthy, the best way to accomplish this is by raising or training another person or in this case a bird.